Loved it! He says, “there are 22 “guests” in total” … I wonder at the quotes around “guests”. Does he think they aren’t guests? Is he a guest himself? Is this an expedition? Also, consider whether you’re going to have him write numerals in his letters or spell out words (e.g., “twenty-two”). Consistency will help establish voice, I think. Keep rolling!
Loved it! He says, “there are 22 “guests” in total” … I wonder at the quotes around “guests”. Does he think they aren’t guests? Is he a guest himself? Is this an expedition? Also, consider whether you’re going to have him write numerals in his letters or spell out words (e.g., “twenty-two”). Consistency will help establish voice, I think. Keep rolling!